Critique Requested

[seleneheart]

This is the art I mentioned in a previous comment that I am struggling with, particularly the character wearing the red shirt. I'm mostly okay with the one in blue, but I know he could be improved as well.

The one in the red shirt though . . . he looks like a doll or something. Part of the problem is that the character himself (Wayne from Letterkenny) is pretty stiff. I mean, his nickname is "Shirtucker". He never untucks his shirt or unbuttons his cuffs (unless he's about to get in a fight). He barely even smiles. The actor tends to play him as moving his whole body when other people would do something else. Wayne is whatever the opposite of languid would be.

Anyway, I went overboard with the stiffness. I used a reference photo, but I had to move the arm.



I'd appreciate any help! I did it on Procreate so I still have layers and I'd love to edit it and replace this. The big bang post has gone up so I'm not breaking any rules posting here.

Comments

[goss]

Thanks! Okay, I think I can see a few things that you can do to relieve some of the doll-like feel to the figure.

(1) Head - I think you could tilt the head slightly downwards and instead of an exact side profile, it could maybe face a bit more towards the other figure.

(2) Right arm - There is some foreshortening in the photo, where the lower arm is moving inwards to the other figure (it's not the same length as the upper arm), so it's not just rigid to its side like a doll's would be.

(3) Musculature - You could bulk up the back/shoulders a bit more, since a quick google shows me that the character is meant to be some kinda tough guy, right?

Happy to help out in any way that I can, so feel free to let me know if you need clarification or any further advice. :)

[seleneheart]

Yes, that's very helpful! Thank you. I'm gonna redo it and then repost.